Standing on the cliff by the sea in a storm

Hit the roar
The roll, the black
Fall
A pumping stomach
Envelope me
Close in
Deep blue, black
And white
Fall away
Small

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2 comments

  1. maleksiuk

    Can I provide some constructive criticism? I’m no poet, but I think the poem would be better if you added ‘Jay’ as the last line and word. E.g. “Deep blue, black / And white / Fall away / Small / Jay” Something to think about, anyway.

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